However, on the other hand, he also has bad breath that smells nasty.

However, he also has bad breath.

For example, he is fluffy. My dog is awesome in many ways.

My dog is awesome in many ways. For example, he is fluffy.

It is apparent that Albus is obviously the greatest dog who ever lived.

Albus is obviously the greatest dog who ever lived.

He has white paws and an orange body. His paws, which are white, are small.

He has small white paws and an orange body.

Albus would never deliberately bite someone on purpose.

He would never deliberately bite someone.

Albus navigates, despite being blind, the house effectively.

Albus, despite being blind, navigates the house effectively.

My dog is without a doubt beyond question the absolute best dog and greatest dog.

My dog is, without a doubt, the best.

He's not good at walking, because he stops a lot. Especially, he loves bushes.

He loves bushes too much to be a good walker.

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SAT Wordiness & Organization Practice (featuring Albus Dumbledog)

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1
However, on the other hand, he also has bad breath that smells nasty.
NO CHANGE
On the other hand, he had bad breath, however.
However, he also has bad breath.
Omit "also"
2
For example, he is fluffy. My dog is awesome in many ways.
NO CHANGE
Omit "for example."
Combine the two sentences into one using "and"
My dog is awesome in many ways. For example, he is fluffy.
3
It is apparent that Albus is obviously the greatest dog who ever lived.
People argue and disagree about whether he is the greatest.
NO CHANGE
It is obvious that albus is apparently the greatest dog.
Albus is obviously the greatest dog who ever lived.
4
He has white paws and an orange body. His paws, which are white, are small.
He has paws, which are small and white, and a body, orange.
NO CHANGE
He has white paws, which are small, and an orange body.
He has small white paws and an orange body.
5
Albus would never deliberately bite someone on purpose.
NO CHANGE
He would never deliberately bite someone.
He would totally bite someone deliberately on purpose.
He would never accidentally bite someone on purpose.
6
Albus navigates, despite being blind, the house effectively.
Albus navigates the house, despite being blind, effectively.
Albus, despite being blind, navigates the house effectively.
NO CHANGE
Omit "despite"
7
My dog is without a doubt beyond question the absolute best dog and greatest dog.
Beyond question, my dog is undoubtedly the best dog
NO CHANGE
My dog is the absolutely undisputed dog that is the worst.
My dog is, without a doubt, the best.
8
I got him on account of the fact that it was agreed that he was cute.
NO CHANGE
I got him on account of his agreed-upon cuteness.
I got him because he was cute.
I got him on account of his being cute.
9
He's not good at walking, because he stops a lot. Especially, he loves bushes.
Especially he loves bushes. He's a bad walker.
NO CHANGE
He loves bushes too much to be a good walker.
Because he stops a lot, he especially loves bushes.
10
His heart disease limits his diet, so he eats carrots instead of salty treats.
So he eats carrots, not salty treats, his diet is limited.
Due to his eating carrots, his disease limits his diet.
Carrots have heart disease.
NO CHANGE

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